“Life in the slums ain’t haff az bad az it looks,” Vic said as he walked me through. All I could think about were those two gaping holes in his gums where his front teeth were meant to be. The derelict ruins of the slums was secondary. “Sure! Dere’s the rats da size of cats, and da toilets dat swalla you whole, but -”
“Did I hear you right? Toilets?”
“Only them that haz flowers. Dey ain’t actual toilets. Dey from outa-space, and preten’ to be johns soes dey can eat yo.”
“Right-o. Guess I’ll stay away from the loos, then.”
As is generally the case this time of the week, this post is part of the weekly Friday Fictioneers challenge in which our fairy blog-mother, Rochelle, posts an image and you come up with a story in 100 words or less.
Dear Melony,
It seems we both went or the slums this week in loo of another type of story. 😉
Your dialogue is wonderful and puts me in mind of a line from a 60’s musical, “Our streets are big and classy, we got rats as big as Lassie.” Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Bahahah it certainly looks that way indeed! I’m so glad the dialogue worked though. I was sure it was too much. Hehe
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I remember when ‘outhouses’ were the norm in our backwater rural area. Many kids believed the ‘flushers’ would eat you.
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Haha my fear with those was always that there would be a snake in them. I never touched butt to surface in them. Thanks for reading! 😄
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Great character you found there! I would be interested to see what else he has to say. 🙂
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Thanks! I think Vic would be hard to continue to write, but I will have to try cuz I’m curious what else he has to say about his home. lol
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A charmingly bizarre story
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Aww thank you! ☺
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Well done, I wish her well with her abstinenance. 😦
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Yeah. It’s definitely not going to be pretty for her. Heh
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I liked the whimsy of this
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Thanks! That makes me smile! 😁
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Oh this made me sad and then made me smile. Well done.
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hehe Thanks! I’m so glad you enjoyed it. 😊
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Wonderful imagination!
Dem dere toilets are scary. Love the dialog.
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Thank you so much! I think Vic is a new fave of mine now. 😄
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I ain’t nevah goin’ ta visit them thar slums… jess sayin’
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Yeah I’m wid you on dat! 😂
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I was wondering why toilets would eat you. Now I now and will act accordingly. Very fun piece.
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That was fun and well written, well done
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Wow. Thanks so much, Mick! That makes me very happy!
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You’re welcome 😊
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Interesting character. We can surmise a lot about him in your words. Well done.
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Wow, a very engaging character. Makes me wonder who he is and why. Good work, Melony. Now you know why I always feel it’s a bad idea to flush and alligator … you just might get it in the end (so to speak).
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Very funny in a sad kind of way, and a realistic picture of a slum.
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Great twist! Alien toilet-eating-children. In that they landed in the slums, I wonder if they are in league with the GOV, lol.
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Rule number 1: “Never take bathroom advice from crazy guys with no teeth!”
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Such a great voice in this, the image of the absent teeth will stay with me for a while.
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Thanks! Vic is quickly becoming one of my favorites
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Very imaginative story. Those toilets sound off putting.
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Very imaginative. Love this, Melanie. Yo, stay away from the fancy loos with z’ flowers yo.
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Hehe thanks so much, Amy! Glad you enjoyed it! 😀
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