“Okay, racers, start. your. engines!”
Bwaaah!
The whistle blows.
“Annnnddd they’re off!” Mommy commentates. “Callum takes an early lead. But what’s this? Liam is closing in. Folks, he could win!”
Callum grabs the track. “Earthquake!”
The Hot Wheels tumble to the carpet as another match begins on foot.
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Melony R Boseley is a short and large fiction writer. She's a Texas girl through and through, but in 2006, she migrated to Australia and now resides in a town outside of Brisbane, QLD. She is a participant in NYC Midnight, Yeah Write, & NaNoWriMo.
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This is an adorable visual. I could totally see my own kids doing exactly this! I wasn’t entirely clear on who the audience for the story was – the voice felt younger in the first half, and then shifted with “commentates.” I loved the way “Hot Wheels” put the action in perspective, and then the shift to a foot race at the end.
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Thanks, Christine! I couldn’t think of another way to say that she was being a mock commentator. haha
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I could picture the kids’ ages so clearly from this. Love the wrecking of the Hot Wheels track. I wasn’t sure what “another match begins on foot” meant.
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Thanks, Jen! I wasn’t sure if I could use race so opted to say match instead. Supposed to mean that after Callum shook the track, he ran away and the others chased after him hehe
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