The new stove came this week. Momma always said if we got a new one she would teach me how to cook. I’m only seven now, so my arms barely reach the stove’s back burners. It’s an electro-gas kind, she tells me. Our old gas one had a bad pilot light or something and was too dangerous to learn.
I wrote about learning to cook in my school diary today. I’m usually too embarrassed to write about what really happens at our house on the weekends. Tomorrow, Daddy’s friends will come over. They will grill yummy meat and drink beer and talk at “full volume” (as Momma puts it) from noon to dark. Pink Floyd and Eagles and Led Zeppelin will echo across the small street.
But tonight all eyes will be on me, because I am going to cook the best Hamburger Helper ever! I’ll make those canned green beans super awesome. No squeakiness for us. (Momma hates squeaky green beans.) Little brother and sister will love it, and everyone will tell me how great I am. For once dinner won’t be about just eating. It’ll be like Christmas and Thanksgiving or my birthday when Grandma spoils me with meatloaf and mashed potatoes.
Momma shows me how to fry the beef, so I break it up and watch it turn from frozen to red then brown. I read the instructions on the box three times before I start adding the milk, water, pasta, and cheese. I don’t want it to burn, so I turn it every two seconds.
Momma tells me I don’t have to over watch it, though. Something about a watched pot. So I stop as she leaves me in charge.
I look at the kitchen table. We never eat there. I think it’s time we did. Instead of eating our meals on the living room couch, I want to be like those people on TV eating around the kitchen table and talking about our day. I have a great story to tell. I’ve been practicing it all day.
The table is covered in trash – old bags from the fried chicken we get from Kroger, cans of near-empty beer, pots and pans still coated with grease and food, old containers of store-bought potato salad from last weekend, and so much more. Flies and gnats circle the mess, too. I’ve grown used to it by now. I don’t even notice the smell anymore.
I can fix it, though. If I move just enough stuff back or to the sink or trash, I can make room for all five of us.
Momma calls out to me to see if I’m okay, and I tell her I’m fine. She’s busy in the living room cleaning up my science project. Daddy won’t like it if he comes home to a messy living room.
I pick up four bags and walk over to the trash, tip-toeing around the cockroaches running across the kitchen linoleum. I take five plates out of the cupboard and head back to the table. I can see the tabletop now, and I have just enough space on the edge to put the stack there.
Some kind of food is stuck to the table. I can’t tell what it is, but the bags must have hid it well. I lift an upside-down plastic cup and scrunch my nose. Something was under it. It’s old and sour smelling and white in color. Then I see movement.
Maggots. Lots of them are crawling around! I throw up a little in my mouth and decide the best course of action is to just hide it for now. I put the cup back down and hear Daddy’s car skid into the driveway.
Daddy shuffles through the front door.
Oh, no! I gasp. I haven’t checked the Hamburger Helper.
He takes one whiff and screams, “Have you burnt dinner?”
I race over to the pot, and Momma does as well. She sees only a tiny layer of burn on the bottom and says that it can be saved.
But that doesn’t settle Daddy. He slams his keys on the floor and stomps into the dining room.
I stand helpless against the wall of the tiny room and cry and say I’m sorry, but it’s not enough. I have ruined his dinner and his night.
I’ve ruined everyone’s night!
My knees give way, and I shake all over. Clinching my fists, I push my nails into my palm.
He picks up a plate and throws it against the wall beside me.
I wrap my arms around my legs and put my head into my knees, but he keeps going until all five plates are shattered to pieces on both sides of me. None of the shards hit me, but I can’t move. I sob into my dirty knees. His words – useless, stupid, ungrateful, pathetic – echo in my ears.
He grabs his keys, slams the door, and screeches down the street in his old clunker, leaving Momma to clean up the mess, finish dinner, calm me down, and put everyone to bed.
I realize now my life will never be like TV.
I can’t imagine living in that filth but I can feel the anxiety of the speaker as daddy pulls in the driveway… Nicely done.
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Thanks so much! I’m a bit of a clean freak now. Daddy wasn’t always like that. Just when he drank, really.
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Your story is rich in imagery, and all the details painted the scene for heartbreaking ending. Such a poignant picture of a child trying her best to bring order to the world around her.
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Thank you very much for your very kind words! I’d love to be able to tell that little girl that she finally succeeded!
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Again, I really love this post! You did such a fantastic job of writing in your voice as a child.
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Thanks, Danielle! Your help was so great! 😄
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Melony, I love this post for you have become every bit of the child is in it.. and you induce anxiety into the reader me about what’s to come when the dad arrives..! Ash
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Thanks, Ash! I’m so pleased I was able to convey the message properly.
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Beautiful. It’s time I get my little ones to help me in the kitchen to do more serious cooking
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Thanks! Every mother should teach their children to cook. Great bonding experience too!
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Beautiful and so painful. The narration from a child’s perspective is brilliant. You made the scene come alive. Well done.
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Thank you so much, Parul! Here I thought I went overboard on description. Lol so happy that it wasn’t the case.
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You exercised such restraint in this. I like how you focus on what you did, filling this story with action words much like a child would do.
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Thanks, Cyn! It was a challenge in parts, so I’m very glad you could confirm I pulled it off. ☺
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You certainly did! I second Cyn’s comment wholeheartedly!
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I loved how you put us right there in the kitchen with the 7 yo you! Beautiful imagery!
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Thanks, Hema! I have wanted to tell this story for a while and realised this was the only way to tell it right. So pleased to know it worked. 😊
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The slow climbing tension, the description of the filth as just part of everyday life, the explosion once dinner is burned…this is really, really good. Seconding Cyn’s comment about restraint – you used the 7-year-old’s POV perfectly.
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Thank you very much!
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This was a fantastic read. The imagery was perfectly dispersed and the piece wrapped me in!
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That’s fantastic feedback 😄 thank you so much!
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A good writer is one who is able to immediately pull the reader into the story and successfully drag them through it emotion-by-emotion and image-by-image. You have done an outstanding job of this! At first, I was smiling at the childhood innocence of the narrator and was happy for her because she was finally going to learn to cook! Something I only learned in the first few sentences, yet felt like I’d known my whole life. But when the mention of bugs and piled up trash crept into the story, I knew something was wrong. I became anxious for the little girl who was so excited to be cooking dinner. And I was scared when she realized she was burning the food.
I’m very sorry you lived those events, but congratulate you on your absolutely stunning delivery of them to your readers! I’m sure you’ve been told before, as great people often are, but you are one heckuva writer!
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Hi, Anna! You have no idea how much your words mean to me. I’m not always the best writer, and you would be able to see that from some of my other pieces, but occasionally, with lots of edits and help from beta readers, I can polish a good story to a great one. This was one of those. It was one story I just had to get right because of how much it has affected me. I certainly came out of that with my sanity intact, but for years I couldn’t cook because of it. And looking at it almost 30 years later, I’m astounded at the strength of that child. Thank you very much for reading! I can only hope my next piece will be as well-received. 😊
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It’s very nice to have wonderful editors/betas, isn’t it? Although, I’m sure you’re a good writer still! It all starts with a story, and that you definitely had. And knew how to tell. Still getting my kudos!!
I’m proud of that child and of you as well! I’m so glad you got out from under the abuse! ((hugs)) I look forward to reading more from you in the future! 🙂
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The way you took such a personal experience and shared it with the world in this way is so powerful. I think every great writer has a unique voice, and don’t we all write best about what we’ve lived through, what we’ve felt for ourselves?
This story is especially meaningful to me because I’ve been through that. I am going through that. He gets so angry, and I’ve been a little messed up by it the past few years. Thank you so much for writing this, it makes me feel like I’m not alone, even if it was so long ago for you.
One more year of high school and I get to move out. I just hope my experience makes a good story one day.
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JJ, this makes me so sad for you. But just know when I did get away, things did get better. It’s taken me a while to gather the courage to tell it, but I am so grateful to know it spoke to you in such a way. Not to mention that it can guarantee that you are certainly not alone. Best of luck to you. 💜
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