You saw me barbs and all.
The twisted wires and frayed edges of my life
Were evident on my countenance,
Yet you still took me in.
Then something amazing happened.
You helped me.
We rolled up the barbed wire together,
Bled together.
The wounds of my life became your own-
The thorny blemishes,
Those abrasions upon the psyche.
Slowly the scars healed.
Now the broken wires of my existence hang on a shelf.
A token reminder of life before you.
But no longer consuming the life
We have now built together.
This post was written for the weekly photo prompt challenge, Friday Fictioneers, via way of Rochelle, our amazing fairy blogmother! I thought for this week, I might try something completely different for myself, because the image just spoke to me differently than usual. It’s probably a bit formulaic and cheesy, but sometimes we need cheese. 😉 If you are interested in reading some other, probably much better, stories, click on that little blue frog. He grants magical powers of amazing linkage!
Dear Melony,
I didn’t find your poem cheesy at all. I’m glad the narrator has found someone who makes her whole. Lovely metaphors.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle! I’m happy for her, as well. 😀
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Just great, love your different take on this weeks prompt
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Thanks, Mike! 😀
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I liked the concept. The lover must be a fantastic person to see the problems and heal them rather than run from them.
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I agree! A patient and loving partner. 🙂 Thank you!
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AWESOME! What a beautifully written poem! Thank you for sharing such talent. I really, really enjoyed this one.
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Wow. Such high praise! Thank you so much for your kind words. 🙂
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No cheesyness… At all and I love anyone using the picture as a metaphor.
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Aww, thanks! The image feels like it works better as a metaphor, in my opinion. 🙂
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Aww this was actually kind of romantic especially your way with words. Nailed it.
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Thank you! I thought it would be too romantic. Haha I’m so glad you like it! 😀
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Not at all. It’s just right 🙂
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how wonderful. truly enjoyed it.
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Thank you very much! 🙂
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I loved the line “rolled up the barbed wire together”. Well done.
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Thank you, Sandra!
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Wowie! What a poem. Love truly finds a way and then stands by until safe togetherness is achieved!
Your poem reminds me so much of Christ and the price He paid on the cross. Call me fanatic if you must, but I truly uplifted!
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Definitely not a fanatic. I had not intended to be Christ-like with this piece, but I’m honored with your praise. Thank you!
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That’s lovely – a great, positive spin on a dark prompt. Nicely told story of hope for the future.
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Thanks, Lynn!
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My pleasure 🙂
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I really loved this!
Reminds me of my favorite song by cold-play : fix you.
🙂
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Thanks! To be compared with such great lyricists is an honor!
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You’re welcome!
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This is very beautiful and not at all cheesy. This is how love should be.
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Thanks! ☺ I totally agree.
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That ROCKS, Melony! I love it! It is so well articulated and so true.
Great take on the prompt.
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Thank you so much for the great praise! 😄
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This is such a beautiful and powerful poem. Love poems are cheesy only when there is no evidence of heartache.
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Thanks, Josslyn. You’re so right now I think about it. 😊
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What a great picture of redemption.
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This was beautiful and far from cheesy! I loved it.
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Very nice!
Lily
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Grand poem! I love the twisting metaphors throughout. You’ve bled out a gem here.
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This is how I wish I had written my poem. Well done!
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Good early draft of a poem. Definitely a keeper.
Cheers!
MG
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